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Post by Hollowgo on Dec 19, 2010 8:23:37 GMT
Yes. There was too much angst and no plot whatsoever, hence why I never bothered with it.
I'm talking a threesome story with actual plot. And little angst.
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Post by Enjorous on Dec 19, 2010 8:33:06 GMT
The only three-way I really know of is Comfortable by Isobel3029 who's also the one who wrote Skin Deep. It was Jasper Bella and Alice and it was really well written.
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Post by Bella+Alice on Dec 20, 2010 2:55:31 GMT
most stories are like that now days, i remember back when i first started reading femslash things where much better, but as the years went on most of the stories i liked got cut off or stopped writing. Now days its much harder to find good work, plot with out porn, like Hollowgo's stuff, he does great work, all of it, and all of it has plot, its not all smut.
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Post by Enjorous on Dec 20, 2010 4:40:03 GMT
Smut in mild doses spread out is alright so long as they're connected with a good story that has a good plot. I think a lot of that stems from misplaced reenforcement; a lot of people like smut so a story with a lot of it will get a lot of reviews so the author will then think that they're writing something great.
Another thing I personally have a problem with is language. Not that I'm a prude, but a 3,000 word chapter should not have F*** appear 20 times along with B**** and S*** (I don't remember the forum rating so I'll censor myself). I mean there are plenty of other adjectives out there.
Okay rant over.
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Post by Hollowgo on Dec 20, 2010 7:00:44 GMT
What if the character is foul mouthed? My pyromancer is quite foul mouthed, so a typical chapter in her POV would have a lot of swearing in it. Maybe not that much, but I'm just saying.  I can totally understand, though. And thanks for the bode of confidence, BA. |
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Post by Bella+Alice on Dec 20, 2010 9:00:14 GMT
i think hollowgo has a point if the character itself is foul mouthed then i think an exception can be made.
I know i cuss like a sailor myself sometimes.
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Post by Enjorous on Dec 20, 2010 18:10:46 GMT
Well yes, a character would. But I mean in 3rd person narration.
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Post by Hollowgo on Dec 20, 2010 19:44:54 GMT
I don't think I've ever seen a story with swearing in it where the story is written in third person. I think it'd be rather silly if it did.
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Post by Enjorous on Dec 20, 2010 20:44:44 GMT
That was precisely my point. Sometimes in first person I find it a little silly too, but only when it's excessive.
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Post by Twigon on Dec 23, 2010 16:51:31 GMT
Meh, it was okay, I guess. The Bella/Alice/Jasper/Edward, I mean.
I found a Bella/Alice/Rosalie! It's rated T, last I checked. I haven't read it myself, but I know that it is a sequel to a Bella/Rosalie. I think it has put on Hiatise, Hiatese, however the hell you spell it.
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Post by Twigon on Dec 23, 2010 16:54:23 GMT
I don't know the rules for cussing on here, so forgive my lapse, please?
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Post by Enjorous on Dec 23, 2010 17:22:47 GMT
Rule of thumb (at least for me) is PG13. By the by it's hiatus. There's your something new for the day  |
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Post by Twigon on Dec 23, 2010 19:57:12 GMT
Who is it that likes Bella with an extra... appendage, I guess is the best term, like in Alice+Bella's storys? I found another story like that, only with a plot. Thirty chapters long at this moment, it's a... Well, it's easier to show you.
24. Choosey Lovers ยป by Blood Venom Tears0816 reviews
"All I wanted was someone to talk to and listen, all I wanted was someone to hold at night and say that they loved me, I didn't ask for this to happen at all. I never meant for things to get out of hand" B/A/L R/E E/J RATED M a tear-jerking triangle
Twilight - Rated: M - English - Hurt/Comfort/Drama - Chapters: 30 - Words: 74,174 - Reviews: 241 - Updated: 12-21-10 - Published: 10-29-10 - Alice & Bella
If anyone is interested, it's number 24 in JC's community when you put the fiction rating to all. I personally only read it to the part where you learn that Bella has the extra appendage, because personally, those kind of storys creep me out a bit. There's nothing wrong with having an extra appendage, but the thought of it on Bella doesn't spark my interest.
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Post by Enjorous on Dec 23, 2010 23:02:37 GMT
Umm, I think I know what you mean by extra appendage. And that's just darn strange, and borderline unnecessary.
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Post by Hollowgo on Dec 23, 2010 23:56:50 GMT
The term is Futa.
It's not my thing. If people like it, that's fine, but it ain't for me. To each their own.
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